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2
PRIEST OF SALES
Copyright © 1993, 1994, 1998, Dorian Scott Cole
Travis
 

ESTABLISH SHOT: BEAU MONDE OF PETERSBURG

INT. BEAU MONDE - DAY

TRAVIS, twenty eight, enters an atrium like area from his office. A RECEPTIONIST sits at a desk near the entrance. Around the theatrium are arched entrances to various sections, variously labeled: DIET, SALON, DANCERCIZE, MODELING, PHOTOGRAPHY.

Travis enters the salon. There are various beauty supplies displayed in the aisle, all marked Beau Monde. As he enters,one of the BEAUTY OPERATORS catches his eye. They discreetly smile at each other as if each has a secret. 

OPERATOR
Anything I can help you with, Travis?
Travis wiggles his eyebrows suggestively, then checks the register tape and moves on.

Travis enters the fitness area. A table in the walkway features exercise products, all with the name Beau Monde on them. He looks through the glass view window at the dancercize class. One of the female exercisers and he share a secretive smile. He moves on.

Travis enters the Modeling area. Tables feature portfolios and beauty products, all with Beau Monde's name on them. A male model is walking the runway and posing for pictures. A female model is sitting on the sidelines, waiting. She notices Travis, and the two share a secret smile. He winks and moves on.

Travis enters the atrium walking toward his office. A MAN waits in the reception area. Seeing Travis, he quickly walks after him, looking angry. He nails Travis at his office door, grabs him by the lapel and jerks him inside.

ANGRY MAN
I oughta kill you!
TRAVIS
Calm down! I don't know you. 
ANGRY MAN
You've been fucking my wife!
TRAVIS
I never go out with married women.
The man opens his wallet and shows Travis a picture.
TRAVIS
She's married?
The man grabs him by the lapels again and slams him against the door. Travis' head hits the door with a THUD.
ANGRY MAN
You touch her again, I'm going to 
prison for murder. You understand?

And I'm not the only one who would 
like to choke the life out of you. 
If I were you I would get out of 
town.

He punches Travis in the stomach, lets him go and walks away. Travis folds and sits down, rubbing his head and clutching his stomach.

INT. TRAVIS' BEAU MONDE MEETING ROOM - DAY

Three reps, PHIL, JEANETTE and SHERRY, are sitting around the conference table, talking low, angrily. Travis enters.

TRAVIS
Hi, everyone! Great news for sales!
SHERRY
Where is Linda?
TRAVIS
She's.... just late, she'll be here
after while. Everyone have a seat.
Everyone remains standing except Jeanette.
JEANETTE
She told me she was going to quit.
She said she can't keep working 
sixty hours, she'll get sick.
PHIL
Yeah, she told me the same thing.
TRAVIS
Fantastic news! We have a new 
promotion going. We have twenty 
percent discounts for new members. 
Isn't that great? And whatever 
discount it takes to get young women
into fitness, do it. 

That should make your jobs a lot easier. 

We put the promotion signs up today.

SHERRY
Who is going to work for Linda?
TRAVIS
We'll work that out if she doesn't
show up.
PHIL
She isn't coming, she went to work
yesterday for Penneys.
TRAVIS
Are you sure?
PHIL
I dropped her off.
SHERRY
Who is going to fill in for her?
TRAVIS
We'll just have to do make do until
I can hire a replacement.
SHERRY
Yeah, you can hire them, but you 
can't keep them. 

Maybe the furniture store has an opening.

Sherry leaves.
PHIL
So that leaves us working eighty
hours each to make up for Sherry?
Forget it.
Phil leaves. Travis looks at Jeanette.
JEANETTE
Hey, I got a family. Don't even 
think of asking me to make up for 
those three.

ESTABLISH SHOT: PETERSBURG DAILY NEWS

INT. NEWSPAPER OFFICE - DAY

Travis enters the Advertising Department and goes directly to the sales desk. SHIRLEY is sitting and talking on the phone. She looks up at him, smiles, and holds up one finger. She winds up her conversation and hangs up. Travis enters the cubicle.

SHIRLEY
Back already? Business must be
booming.
TRAVIS
Or busting. I need to run my ads
again. Same two.
Shirley looks in a file and pulls out two ads.
SHIRLEY
These two?
Travis nods.
TRAVIS
Make this help wanted ad about
three times this size.

I've got to get out of this
business. I hired three new sales
people last week, there all gone 
this week. And the one that sticks 
around can't sell.

SHIRLEY
I can make the ad bigger, but it
won't look right. You need more
words. 
TRAVIS
OK, I'll call you with more B.S.
Anyone put in any good sales 
ads this week? These seventy hour 
weeks are getting to me. 
What I wouldn't give for a 
forty-hour week and a steady woman.
SHIRLEY
We have new ads for selling perfume,
jewelry, and bottled water. 

I hear door to door meat is big. 

TRAVIS
Better off dead meat.
SHIRLEY
Maybe we can bring you better luck 
with the steady woman. Try 
personals?
INT. GINA'S OFFICE - DAY

Gina is sitting behind her desk typing into a notebook computer.

INTERCOM (V.O.)
Gina?
GINA
Yes?
INTERCOM(V.O.)
Travis is here.
GINA
Send him in.
Travis appears in the doorway. Gina rises and walks to meet him, beaming, expansive. Gina closes the door after him and shows Travis to a seat.
TRAVIS
You wanted to see me?
GINA
I'm screening for a new position. 
Are you interested?
TRAVIS
Maybe. What is it?
GINA
We're going to start introducing
our beauty clubs to corporate 
America. I need people who can
promote it.
Gina dials her phone.
TRAVIS
I've sold to corporations. 
I can do that. 
GINA
Margo, I have a candidate, can we
come down?
(Hangs up)
That's what I'm looking for, people
who can get in the corporate door.
I'm also looking for certain....
attributes, not just sales skill. 

This is a glamour profession and
some things are important. Ever do 
any modeling yourself, anything like
that?

Travis shakes his head. 

GINA
You'll be seen in every kind of 
clothing imaginable from bathing 
suits to exercise costumes.... You
understand where we're coming from?
Travis nods.
GINA (Cont.)
We would like to see your physique, 
so let's go down to the examination
room.
Travis, hiding his unease, checks his watch, and counters. 
TRAVIS
Why don't we go to lunch and talk 
about the position.
Gina rises. 
GINA
What size briefs do you wear?
TRAVIS
Thirty two. Why?
Gina pulls a package of briefs from a drawer and holds them up.
GINA
Posing briefs.
TRAVIS
Look, I - 
Gina pulls him from the chair and pushes him toward the door.
GINA
C'mon, dragging your feet makes life a drag. 
Dare to be daring.
INT. MARGO'S EXAMINATION ROOM - DAY

Margo and TRACY are sitting, waiting. Gina and Travis enter.

TRAVIS
Hi, Margo. 
Travis Waves to Tracy.
GINA
You know Margo Beauchesne, our 
Company Physician, Fitness 
Specialist - 
TRAVIS
Cosmetologist, Doctor of everything.
MARGO
Everything beautiful.
GINA
And this is Margo's new assistant,
Tracy Vonderlagge, Fitness Trainer, 
and Beauty Consultant. 

Margo and Tracy are part of our
screening process. 

Gina points Travis to a screened area and holds out the briefs. 
TRAVIS (O.S.)
I don't see why I have to go 
through this. I'm a club manager.
MARGO
This is the only opportunity for 
thrills we workaholics get.
TRAVIS
I pose in my own club, you know.
GINA
Kenrick's rules. We need to make
sure you didn't develop a pot 
belly or become a body builder.
TRAVIS (O.S.)
(Imitates Arnold Swartzenegger)

I'm not a body builder. 

TRACY
If it was a female candidate, you would be 
pushing her up there and taking her clothes 
off as she went. 
MARGO
You get him, Tracy.
MARGO
(Teasing)
We look for proportion and muscle
tone. Shaping exercises make 
fit and beautiful bodies.
TRAVIS 
I think I've seen that in our ads.
GINA
Your body is our best advertising. 
A sleek body means you use the club. 
A man comes out from behind the screen in posing briefs. The three women share a smile between themselves and Travis. Travis breathes a sigh of relief. 

They turn their attention to the man and look at him from different angles.

GINA
What do you think?
MARGO
Something isn't right. 
Gina roughs his hair. Shakes her head. 
GINA
Hair needs styled.
TRACY
Nice pecs, muscular, not flabby. 
Good round buns. Flex your leg.
The man flexes his leg. 
MARGO
Well proportioned, not excessively
defined. 

Suck your gut in.

The man does and Margo shakes her head.
MARGO
Still not right.
TRACY
You're standing there like a 
thirteen year old girl who just
discovered she has breasts. It's
throwing your entire body off. 
Stand straight and put your hips
forward just a little.
The man thrusts his hips slightly forward, at first awkwardly, then more confidently. Gina observes from the side.
GINA
That's it. That's the physique we
want. You pass the first
screening. 

I want to take you down
stairs and do a photo shoot and see 
how you handle yourself. It will
take fifteen minutes.

Unless you're chicken, like Travis, 
here.

Gina, Margo, and Tracy shake their head. Travis grabs the posing briefs from Gina and begins taking off his shirt. Tracy comes forward with a bottle of liquid makeup and starts smearing it over his face, neck, chest and hands. He smiles at her as she does so, and she tries to stay professional, but responds.

INT. PHOTO STUDIO - DAY 

A photographer, FRED, is just finishing a shoot with a female MODEL on an exercise machine. Gina, Travis and Tracy enter. Travis has redressed in his suit.

FRED
Don't open your legs so wide, we 
want to suggest it, not photograph
it. That's better, now make it look
painful.... now show us you like it....
give me a painful but oh so sweet look. 

Ah, that's it. Perfect.
We've got it. You're marvelous. 
Tell the agency to call in a couple
of weeks, we may have another 
assignment.

Fred turns to Gina, wary of her.
FRED (Cont.)
This lady is going to sell equipment.
I think we should make her exclusive 
to this line. In fact, I think we 
should include her on the perfume ad.
(Beat)
I suppose you want something?
Gina nods.
FRED (Cont.)
I've been shooting all morning, 
right through lunch. My next shoot
is right now. Can this wait?
Gina shakes her head no. Fred shrugs.
GINA 
I'll send for lunch, Fred. 
Give Travis a test.
FRED
(Enthusiasm is history)
OK, Travis, get out there, keep your
jacket on, give me some poses.
Travis hesitantly walks on stage, after a moment he tries a couple of poses. Fred doesn't click the camera.
FRED
OK, take off your coat, dangle it
over your shoulder. Then look at
Gina. Focus on her.
Travis does that and Fred snaps a couple of shots. 
FRED (Cont.)
This isn't working. 

Poise is way off, no presence.

Travis walk around.

TRAVIS
How's that?
GINA
I'll help.
Gina enters the stage. 
 
 
GINA (Cont.)
Posture is everything, club manager. 
You have to start from straight up 
and down, head up, belly in. That's
center, and you always come back to
center.
Travis visibly straightens. 
 
 
GINA (Cont.)
OK, Travis, chase me around the 
stage. Don't catch me, just have
fun doing it.
They trek around the stage a few times. Gina pantomimes slow motion and Travis follows her lead. Fred gets several shots. They quit and Tracy hands him a silk shirt with an open front. He puts it on.
GINA
OK, back to center. Stand up 
straight. Head back, it will bring 
your shoulders with it. That's good.
(Backs away)
Now keep your focus on me. Put
your hips forward a little, now
walk. OK.... OK.... Don't look
at the camera, look at me. 

Put just a little bounce in that walk.
Put your hands in your pockets.

Think happy, Travis. 

No, that's cheesy. You've just 
been laid and you're on cloud nine. 

That's it, you've got it, 
now twirl around. That's good, now 
do it again, but this time, when you 
face me, seduce me with your eyes. 

Wow! Now look at the camera. 

My God, that look!

This guy will sell. Put that on a glossy 
ad then you walk it into a corporate 
office and it's going to sell.

INT. GINA'S OFFICE - DAY

Gina is standing behind her desk, Travis is seated in front.

GINA
What do you think?
TRAVIS
I already know what working for 
you is like. I like corporate 
accounts. What's not to like?
GINA 
I feel real good about you, I'm 
going to submit your name. 
Gina walks around the desk as if to shake his hand, but instead takes his face in her hands and looks directly into his eyes.
GINA (Cont.)
We're going to work very closely.
The life of this company depends on
how well we do. Commitment is a 
two way street. You try hard for me,
I'll never let you down. But one 
thing, don't ever lie to me. Sales
people think lying is just a game, 
but you lie to me, about anything,
you're fired.
She shakes his hand. Travis walks toward the door.
GINA
Who were you thinking about when 
you got that seductive look on your
face?
TRAVIS
(Beat)
I can't lie, so.... better just to 
be quiet.
GINA
Don't start that. Let's keep 
things open - no secrets.
TRAVIS
(Sighs)
The reason for the seductive 
look.... it was you.
Gina thoughtfully watches him leave. 

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