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6
PRIEST OF SALES
Copyright © 1993, 1994, 1998, Dorian Scott Cole
Sweet Temptation
 
 
INT. TRAVIS' APARTMENT - DAY

Travis is pacing the floor, looking at and touching thetelephone, afraid to call, but inescapably drawn. He finallypicks it up and dials.

 
TRACY (V.O.)
Hello.
 
 
TRAVIS
Tracy, this is Travis.
 
 
Beat.
 
TRACY (V.O.)
(Formal)
How are you, Travis?
 
 
TRAVIS
I'm fine, except I miss you.
 
 
TRACY (V.O.)
(Uncertain of him)
I suppose you do, one way or 

another.
 
 

TRAVIS
I'm sorry I let you down. Can we

get together for dinner and talk?

Just dinner.
 
 

TRACY (V.O.)
(Beat)
Can I pick the restaurant?
 
 
TRAVIS
Sure.
 
 
INT. FORMAL RESTAURANT - NIGHT

Travis and Tracy are being seated at a nice table. Both are elegantly dressed. The maitre d appears, bows and exchanges pleasantries with a formal, stilted accent. He hands them a winelist and leaves. Another waiter fills their water glasses with bottled spring water. Travis studies the wine list and offers it to Tracy. She passes and Travis lays it down. Moments later a wine steward appears to take their order. Travis orders a Frenchwine, properly pronouncing it with a French accent. The waiter nods and leaves.

 
TRACY
Do you often order French wines?
 
 
TRAVIS
Only on business and formal 

occasions. I prefer the California

wines.
 
 

TRACY
Then why the French wine? I really

don't care.
 
 

TRAVIS
Because you're worth it. Call it

penance.

 

TRACY

(Icily)

Just how much am I worth?
 
 

TRAVIS
(Beat)
Is that what this expensive 

restaurant is about?
 
 

TRACY
I don't know. Is it?
 
 
TRAVIS
(Beat)
I'm not trying to buy my way into

your heart, if that's what you 

think. 

The wine steward returns with a bottle on a tray, approaching out of Tracy's view.
 
TRACY
I don't know what to think. What

should I think about a man who screws

everything in a skirt just because

he can.
 
 

Travis looks very embarrassed. The wine steward does an about face and leaves.
 
TRAVIS
I suppose you've never done anything

wrong? A pillar of moral rectitude?

Tracy bows her head, troubled about something. 
 
TRAVIS (Continued)
Tell me, what can I do to apologize?

To make it up to you? To put us

back together?
 
 

TRACY
Maybe you could start by explaining

just what it was you thought you

were doing to me.
 
 

TRAVIS
I was enjoying your company.
 
 
TRACY
And you didn't enjoy those other

women?
 
 

Travis takes a deep breath and sits silently. The wine steward approaches, shows Travis the bottle. Travis nods. The steward opens the bottle, pours some in a cup on a chain around his neck, tastes, approves, and pours a small amount in Travis's glass. Travis tastes and nods. The steward pours both of their glasses and leaves. 
 
TRAVIS
I was falling in love.
 
 
TRACY
We knew each other less than two 

weeks. You sweep two or three

women off their feet every week.
 
 

TRAVIS
From the moment we met, I felt 

very comfortable with you.
 
 

TRACY
You seem to get comfortable with

women very easily.
 
 

TRAVIS
You're not making this easy for me.

Why did you agree to see me again?
 
 

TRACY
I made a mistake once. A big one.

You're NOT going to be another.

The maitre d approaches the table and stands with the menus folded before him.
 
INT. MARGO'S SALON - DAY

Tracy is doing a facial on a woman. Travis enters. Tracy sees him and smiles, pleased but cautious. She directs him to a chair. He watches her do the finishing touches on the woman. Tracy sees him watching and they exchange glances. 

The woman leaves and Tracy begins to gently clean his face with a cloth. Their eyes meet, Tracy melts as she cleans, but gets uncomfortable. She angrily grabs the mud, slaps it on his face and smears it all over his face and clothes with a vengeance. After a moment she stops, sees a clean spot on his nose, dabs some on his nose and they laugh. 

 
EXT. BEAU MONDE ENTERPRISES HEADQUARTERS - DAY

Travis waits in his car. Tracy exits the building. She gets in the car with Travis and he is beaming.

 
TRACY
OK, what's up?
 
 
TRAVIS
I have put together five corporate

accounts in five weeks. And that

got me promoted to Assistant 

National Manager. 
 
 

Tracy smiles, but is reserved.
 
TRAVIS
Is something wrong?
 
 
TRACY
Everyone thinks you're screwing 

Gina. You spend more time with

her than you do with me. And

your promotion proves it.
 
 

Travis slumps against the steering wheel. 
 
TRAVIS
It isn't fair. Gina is the one who

is putting my life back together!

Without her help.... I'd be lost!

Why are they doing this? I'm going

to end up losing you all over again.
 
 

Beat. Tracy sees he is sincere and puts her arms around him.
 
EXT. TRACY'S APARTMENT - NIGHT

Travis walks Tracy to her door. They stop by the door and he kisses her. She takes out her key to unlock the door. He kisses her again.

 
TRAVIS
Good night. See you tomorrow?
Tracy grabs him by the sleeve, unlocks the door and pulls him in.

INT. TRACY'S BEDROOM - NIGHT

Travis and Tracy are in bed. Travis is holding Tracy, strokingher lovingly. She cuddles closer to him. He begins kissing her, covering her body, lingering briefly, tantalizing her. At her lips he kisses lightly, teasing, until she can take it no longer and pulls him onto her. 

 
DISSOLVE

They are laying side by side, embraced.

 
TRACY
Gina likes you. I can see it in

the way she looks at you.
 
 

TRAVIS
There is nothing going on between

us. Gina doesn't want a

relationship.
 
 

TRACY
You like her.
 
 
TRAVIS
Not like I like you.
 
 
TRACY
She's going to be your biggest 

temptation.
 
 

TRAVIS
I think you're just jealous.
 
 
TRACY
I am jealous. You can't have a

close relationship with two women.
 
 

TRAVIS
You're awfully suspicious.
 

TRACY

(Beat)
I'm going to tell you something I

haven't told anyone. I told you I

made a big mistake once.

(Beat)
Half way through my Sophomore year

of college, my father lost his job.

I had no money coming in and my

financial aid was exhausted. There

was a men's college nearby, and

there was a professor who taught at

both campuses. Psychology. He 

kept trying to get me to go to work

for him - he had a sex therapy

business, he said. I always said, no.

Then when my Dad lost his job and I 

went begging, the professor asked me 

to work as a sex surrogate. 

(Beat)
There were a lot of professors who 

had these problems - premature

ejaculation, and fear of women - all

kinds of weird things. I had to see

several of them once or twice a 

week. 

(Beat)
Then one day the police came and 

arrested me - arrested us all. The

jerk was running a prostitution ring 

with college girls. Some of them

knew it. I didn't - I was gullible.

I got a police record, my name was 

in the paper - it was so 

humiliating. Everyone on campus

knew. I had to go to a different

college my Junior year. 

(Beat)
I'll never trust any man. Don't

expect me to trust you with Gina.
 
 

INT. BEAU MONDE OF NICHOLASVILLE - DAY

Mark is in the modeling studio explaining the program to a prospect. Travis enters, carrying a book. Mark ignores him and continues explaining the program. After staring at Mark for a long time, Travis takes a seat and waits. Mark finally takes papers and has the woman sign them. Mark shakes her hand and she leaves, with Mark following her up the aisle past Travis. Mark stops by Travis, is less than friendly.

 
MARK
Sorry to make you wait. I can't 

afford to let a prospect get away.
 
 

TRAVIS
It's OK.
 
 
MARK
So what's up, another new promotion,

or another promotion?
 
 

They begin walking into the atrium toward Mark's office.
 
TRAVIS
Nothing actually. I saw this book -

a new one on superstrings - I thought

you might like it. I was in town

so....
 
 

Travis gives him the book.
 
MARK
Is this supposed to make up for

something?
 
 

TRAVIS
No. I just.... You don't get to do 

what you want to do. At least this

thing is good reading - supposed to 

be.
 
 

MARK
Gee thanks. Life by vicarious.
 
 
Travis stops and pulls the book away from Mark.
 
TRAVIS
I didn't mean to insult you, I just

wanted to help. 

You're responsible for your own
life, you know. You want to do 

something, you do it.
 
 

MARK
Yeah, Mark the miracle worker. Who

told you that crap anyway?
 
 

TRAVIS
Gina.
 
 
Mark stops walking and looks at Travis.
 
MARK
I guess you should know.
 
 
Mark walks more quickly toward his office. Travis remains.
 
TRAVIS
(Beat)
We're not doing anything. Nothing

at all.
 
 

Mark quickly reverses and is back to Travis, assaulting him verbally.
 
MARK
She likes to meditate a lot. Get 

to know a person deep down. Gets 

in your soul. Then it's meditation 

in the nude, and making love with 

the mirrors reflecting. And going 

into ecstatic trances in her hot 

tub or her living room and ending 

up in bed. Or screwing right

there in the hot tub. She likes it

best standing up, doesn't she. You

know what I'm talking about!
 
 

Travis looks shaken.
 
TRAVIS
No, I don't.
 
 
MARK
All that spiritual stuff is just 

her foreplay. Just a prelude to

sex. Don't mess with me, Travis, 

I know how the lady works.
 
 

Travis gives Mark a sick look and leaves.
 
MARK
Congratulations on your promotion.

You got it all.
 
 

INT. GINA'S KITCHEN - NIGHT

Gina and Travis are seated. Gina rises and begins clearing dishes from the table.

 
GINA
I'll wash, you load.
Travis opens the dishwasher door and begins loading.
 
TRAVIS
Why do you always wash your dishes

before putting them in the 

dishwasher?
 
 

GINA
That's not a dishwasher, that's a

marketing concept. It won't clean.
 
 

TRAVIS
Then why did you buy it?
 
 
GINA
The builder who built the house

recommended it. He said since I

was single I probably didn't need

the upgrade model. He failed to 

tell me this model was just the

manufacturer's marketing concept, 

it doesn't actually wash the dishes.
 
 

TRAVIS
So what are you going to do with 

the thing?
 
 

GINA
Exchange it for their competitor's

model. It's the best advertising 

their competitor has.
 
 

TRAVIS
Makes you think about our marketing,

doesn't it.
 
 

GINA
Jordan and I have an understanding.

If it isn't genuine, we don't sell

it. Believe me, a lot comes down

from Kenrick that's gold plated 

bologna.

Travis closes the dishwasher door and Gina starts it.
 
TRAVIS
How important are your visions? 

Do you hear voices from God?
 
 

GINA
(Laughs)
No. They're only my own internal

gropings. My subconscious breaks

through and tells me something, but

it's in symbols, like a puzzle. 

It's like looking through a mist -

instead of seeing clearly, I see

everything disguised.

C'mon, I'm going to get
comfortable - I'll meet you in the

meditation room.
 
 

INT. GINA'S MEDITATION ROOM - NIGHT

Gina and Travis are getting seated in the meditation room. Gina's clothing is sheer, revealing, sensual. Travis is drawn to her, but at the same time fearful.

 
TRAVIS
Are you testing my mettle?
 
 
GINA
No, does this bother you? I'm 

sorry, I'll change.

Gina starts to leave. Travis stops her.
 
TRAVIS
No, don't. You've helped me 

understand I don't have to.... 

taste every sweet temptation.
 
 

Gina smiles at him, sits and switches on the computer. She begins switching through images.
 
TRAVIS
People are talking about us. They

think there is more going on between

us than there is.
 
 

GINA
People will think what they want.

I can't live my life by other's 

small minds.
 
 

TRAVIS
If everything you see is so veiled, 

why do you do this stuff? It all 

sounds like some voodoo ritual 

straight from Africa. You know, 

those dances where they get ecstatic

and everything ends in an orgy or

something.
 
 

GINA
(Really disturbed)
Hey! 
 
 
TRAVIS
(Laughs nervously, sobers)
I just want to understand. This is

really weird for me. 
 
 

Gina eyes him suspiciously.
 
GINA
I did misuse it once, with Mark. 

But this is really important to me. 

It's driving me crazy.

Dreams are your subconscious 

knocking. They're a prod to get

you to start unraveling yourself.
 
 

TRAVIS
I suppose you're right.
 
 
GINA
I've had ecstatic visions since I

was a kid. But I've made very 

little progress unlocking them. 

And it's because I really haven't

grown - matured - very much.
 
 

TRAVIS
I doubt that.
 
 
GINA
Visions tell me more than a dream. 

They stay in the back of my mind 

and one day I understand - I see 

life happening and the vision just 

makes all the sense in the world. 
 
 

TRAVIS
You have a lot of these visions?
 
 
GINA
I have ecstatic experiences maybe

once a month, but no vision. I 

have a vision maybe on average every

.... five years.

I meditate to try and see within

myself to find the answers. 
 
 

TRAVIS
But this sounds so.... hocus-pocus.

If you're having this dream, and 

it's so important, why don't you

understand it? 
 
 

GINA
Because it's painful. It's telling

me something about myself that I'm

hiding from, so it's telling it to

me in symbols.
 
 

TRAVIS
If it's painful, why do it?
 
 
GINA
We're not comfortable with a lot of

things about ourselves. Growth....

stretches us in painful ways. But 

if you really try to understand and

help yourself, you unlock yourself 

from the chains that hold you back. 

Enough! Let's do it.

She has the image of a casket projected. She repeats over and over like a chant.
 
GINA
Why am I afraid to live? Why am I

afraid to live? Why am I afraid to

live....
 
 

POV SHOT: Gina looking outward from the casket. Suddenly Kenrick is standing by the casket holding a candle and looking down at her.
 

KENRICK

Don't you laugh as the hearse goes

by, for you may be the next to die.
 
 

POV SHOT: Gina sees the faces of other people reflected in the candlelight. Wells, Margo, and Tracy are among them, but the rest are unknown. The vision fades as Kenrick continues.
 
KENRICK
The undertaker takes you in while 

all of your relatives sit and grin.
 
 

Gina and Travis are staring at the image of the casket in the mirror. Gina's attention returns to the present.
 
GINA
People were at the funeral this 

time.
 
 

TRAVIS
What does that mean?
 
 
GINA
I have no idea.
 
 
TRAVIS
How do you solve the mystery?
 
 
GINA
Little clues. 

I love color. Let's work on 

that a little. I was wearing a 

white dress.
 
 

TRAVIS
White wedding gowns are a symbol

of purity. 
 
 

GINA
I'm definitely not pure.
 
 
TRAVIS
Were you mourning the death of 

your virginity?
 
 

Gina hits him.
 
TRAVIS
Maybe not actual virginity, but 

symbolically?
 
 

GINA
It's important how I feel about 

the dream. How I feel about the

color.
 
 

TRAVIS
There are black colors in the dream.

The casket. Kenrick's clothes.

What does black mean? Emptiness?

Hopelessness?
 
 

GINA
Yes, I think so. That feels right.

When I think about the dress,

how do I feel? Like I'm burying 

marriage. My chances for having a

husband are going. I'm lonely for

companionship.
 
 

Travis puts his hand over hers comfortingly. Gina sits looking at the casket and the image of her wedding gown appears. Kenrick stands beside the casket.
 
KENRICK
It's too late, Gina. Too late.
The casket is lowered into the ground. As Gina sits looking at the image she says:
 
GINA
But I'm not dead yet!
DISSOLVE

Gina and Travis are still sitting and staring at an image, which is now of a wedding. They are holding hands and sitting close together. The image changes to a bride and groom kissing. Travis kisses Gina on the cheek. She kisses him back on the lips. Travis kisses her on the lips and lingers. She pushes him away and lays down. He lays down next to her. She smiles knowingly and puts her hand on his chest keeping him away.

 
TRAVIS
Just one more.
 
 
She shakes her head no, serious but smiling as if teasing.
 
TRAVIS
Please.
 
 
She allows him to kiss her, then pushes him away, but he is still close. 
 
TRAVIS
Not fair, that wasn't long enough.
 
 
She smiles and gives in. Travis kisses her at length. The two entwine and stroke each other sensuously. Finally Gina stops them and pushes them apart.
 
TRAVIS
Come on, Gina, you're lonely. 

What would it hurt. After all, I 

know how to satisfy a woman like

she's never been satisfied before.

Gina shakes her head no, but Travis leans into her again and kisses her again. He begins to push her clothes off. She pulls hem back on, at first playfully, then helps take them off and begins undressing him. Soon they are fully disrobed. She leans back, nude, and waves her finger at him. 
 
GINA
No, no, no, we can't do this.

You're learning to resist and I 

have vowed to stay chaste. 
 
 

Travis drags himself to her feet. He kisses her toes then pulls himself forward and kisses her calves.
 
GINA
Look but don't touch.
 
 
Travis continues to her knees, then thighs.
 
GINA
You can't seduce me, Travis, I can

resist.

Travis kisses to her abdomen until he is laying on top of her. She begins to ravish him.
 
DISSOLVE
 
They are making love and Gina is nearing a climax. 
 
CUT TO:
 
INT. GINA'S BEDROOM - NIGHT

Gina sits up in bed, gasping for air.

 
GINA
Nooooo! Damn it, no! Not with 

Travis. 
 
 

Gina calms and takes her tape recorder from the stand by her bed and talks into it.
 
GINA
I am so mad at myself.

I pretended in my dream that I 

couldn't resist Travis and I let 

him have me. 

I am soooo damned self indulgent. 

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